Wow, I'm glad life won't really be like that...that would be insane! Great job on the detail work...it was still bloody/gory, though, so I didn't finish reading it.
One suggestion I have for you is to go back and fix some words you forgot to capitalize (like the beginning of a sentence, or the name Thalia.
Wow, I'm glad life won't really be like that...that would be insane! Great job on the detail work...it was still bloody/gory, though, so I didn't finish reading it.
ReplyDeleteOne suggestion I have for you is to go back and fix some words you forgot to capitalize (like the beginning of a sentence, or the name Thalia.
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Hey Spinach you should keep writing the story and post updated versions of it. I really like it so far. GREAT job, you write like a boy:)
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